Problems with Parenthetical Phrases Exercise (90)
Each of the sentences below has an error that involves incorrectly sharing words to convey two related ideas. Rephrase each sentence as necessary so that the parenthetical phrase could be omitted without compromising the structural integrity of the main clause.
Answers and Explanations
Original: That is some of the most, if not, the most remote country in the area.
Correct : That is some of the most remote, if not the most remote, country in the area.
Original: Security professionals must monitor events generated from, and the health of, the devices on a continual basis.
Correct : Security professionals must continuously monitor events generated from the devices, as well as monitor the devices themselves.
Original: Worse, family members may have been rejected, or may have removed themselves out of shame, from family and social networks.
Correct : Worse, family members may have been rejected by, or may have removed themselves out of shame from, family and social networks.
Original: We all have and will continue to sacrifice something for the opportunity to win what every player covets: championships.
Correct : We all have sacrificed, and will continue to sacrifice, something for the opportunity to win what every player covets: championships.
Original: I have an investment, and a concern about, the outcome.
Correct : I have an investment in, and a concern about, the outcome.