Restrictive and Nonrestrictive Clauses Exercise (491)

Revise each sentence so that it is correctly worded and punctuated.

Answers and Explanations

1.
Original: Plans to move the exhibit to its new home in the Grand Egyptian Museum scheduled to open in 2018 have yet to be divulged.
Correct : Plans to move the exhibit to its new home in the Grand Egyptian Museum, scheduled to open in 2018, have yet to be divulged.

The lack of internal punctuation in this sentence leaves the impression that more than one Grand Egyptian Museum exists, and that the one in question is the one scheduled to open in 2018. Framing the phrase about the scheduled opening between commas indicates that it is a parenthetical interjection about the one and only Grand Egyptian Museum.

2.
Original: "Annie" is the big-screen adaptation of the famous Broadway musical about the adventures of an orphan girl which spawned film versions in 1982 and 1999.
Correct : "Annie" is the big-screen adaptation of the famous Broadway musical about the adventures of an orphan girl, which spawned film versions in 1982 and 1999.

Omitting a comma before "which" erroneously implies that more than one famous Broadway musical about the adventures of an orphan girl exist, and one of them spawned film versions of the musical. Insertion of the comma signals that the reference to the two earlier film versions is simply additional information.

3.
Original: Their exploits were the basis of the 1979 movie, "Escape from Alcatraz."
Correct : Their exploits were the basis of the 1979 movie "Escape from Alcatraz."

The comma erroneously sets the movie title off from the epithet "the 1979 movie," treating it as an appositive (a word or phrase that identifies something named with one or more other words immediately before or after), implying that the film was the only one released in 1979. Without the comma, the epithet simply describes what "Escape from Alcatraz" is and the year in which it was released.

4.
Original: Jones is government-affairs director for Americans for Safe Access, the leading organization that has been championing the measure for years.
Correct : Jones is government-affairs director for Americans for Safe Access, a leading organization that has been championing the measure for years.

The wording of the original sentence suggests that Americans for Safe Access is foremost among organizations that have long supported a measure. But the point of the description is that the organization has long supported the measure, not its prominence in doing so. The following alternative revision is simpler: "Jones is government-affairs director for Americans for Safe Access, which has been championing the measure for years."

5.
Original: The fire also threatened a UC Berkeley facility, the 4,270-acre Blodgett Research Forest where researchers study fire management.
Correct : The fire also threatened a UC Berkeley facility, the 4,270-acre Blodgett Research Forest, where researchers study fire management.

Multiple Blodgett Research Forests, including the one where researchers study fire management, are implied here. But the final five words constitute a modifying subordinate phrase describing one purpose of the single forest.

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