Wordiness Exercise (276)

A common stylistic fault is wordiness, using more words than necessary to express a simple thought. The following sentences contain often-heard expressions that contribute to a boring writing style. Edit the sentences to express them in fewer words.

Answers and Explanations

1.
Original: As I finished reading the letter, I came to the realization that I had misinterpreted all his actions.
Correct : As I finished reading the letter, I realized that I had misinterpreted all his actions.

2.
Original: Their employer said three workers would be laid off due to the fact that sales had declined.
Correct : Their employer said three workers would be laid off because sales had declined.

3.
Original: At that point in time the ship had entered the most dangerous part of the passage.
Correct : Then the ship had entered the most dangerous part of the passage.

4.
Original: I want you to take my dog in the event that I must remain hospitalized.
Correct : I want you to take my dog if I must remain hospitalized.

5.
Original: Regardless of the fact that we have been friends for thirty years, I must report this to the police.
Correct : Although we have been friends for thirty years, I must report this to the police.

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